[已解决问题] 英文书信的书写
要给老总发封E-mail，询问上次面试情况，怎么个问法，虽然上次用的是中文，但是用人家是国际公司，用地道的英语比较礼貌。
求助。
邮件标题写什么好，怎么个问法比较好？
中文内容大概如下
你好xx经理，我是xx经理介绍来的xx，您1月份在上海的时候我们见过面了。您好，等了2个月的消息，特地来询问下，对这个工作兴趣比较大，对于工作的要求也己经做好了心理准备，不知道您那边怎么样，请给我个答复好么，我会一直等着您的消息的，非常感谢。
问题补充：Mr.A,
Dear A,how have you been? This is D introduced to you by manager C,and it was great pleasure to meet you in ShangHai in Jan. Do you still remember me who from ShangHai Fisheries University.
I have sended some E-mail to B but have no information,maybe I sended the wrong address.You said he will contact me and i am always check my E-mail.
I'm intersted in the job and well perpared,I believe that my ability of learning won't let you disappointed.
Thank you for your consideration and look forward seeing you again.
best regards
D
初步写了一下 能不能看看有什么语法问题没
情况大概是这样的有4个人 ABCD D是我 C是介绍人 A是director B是和A一起见我的人 区域经理吧
A说B会联系我，当时那天，但是好几天没反应，发了几封mail也没回，本来是打算放弃的，但是我得介绍人还是建议我再去问问，所以这次抱着侥幸的心理，直接mail给大老板，所以这封mail是给大老板看的，3楼的，谢谢了，您的回复是对我很大的鼓励，顺便再帮个忙看看信的内容，还有英文格式是否合适，谢谢～
谢谢能够提出宝贵意见,不会介意的,如果我介意的话,也不会把拙劣的英语贴出来了,能指出问题的所在还是很重要的,我由衷的感谢.
求助。
邮件标题写什么好，怎么个问法比较好？
中文内容大概如下
你好xx经理，我是xx经理介绍来的xx，您1月份在上海的时候我们见过面了。您好，等了2个月的消息，特地来询问下，对这个工作兴趣比较大，对于工作的要求也己经做好了心理准备，不知道您那边怎么样，请给我个答复好么，我会一直等着您的消息的，非常感谢。
问题补充：Mr.A,
Dear A,how have you been? This is D introduced to you by manager C,and it was great pleasure to meet you in ShangHai in Jan. Do you still remember me who from ShangHai Fisheries University.
I have sended some E-mail to B but have no information,maybe I sended the wrong address.You said he will contact me and i am always check my E-mail.
I'm intersted in the job and well perpared,I believe that my ability of learning won't let you disappointed.
Thank you for your consideration and look forward seeing you again.
best regards
D
初步写了一下 能不能看看有什么语法问题没
情况大概是这样的有4个人 ABCD D是我 C是介绍人 A是director B是和A一起见我的人 区域经理吧
A说B会联系我，当时那天，但是好几天没反应，发了几封mail也没回，本来是打算放弃的，但是我得介绍人还是建议我再去问问，所以这次抱着侥幸的心理，直接mail给大老板，所以这封mail是给大老板看的，3楼的，谢谢了，您的回复是对我很大的鼓励，顺便再帮个忙看看信的内容，还有英文格式是否合适，谢谢～
谢谢能够提出宝贵意见,不会介意的,如果我介意的话,也不会把拙劣的英语贴出来了,能指出问题的所在还是很重要的,我由衷的感谢.
最佳答案
楼主danieldai，
你的修改看过了，中国式英语味道很重，而且有好几处错误，还请楼主不要怪我讲话太直接啊。其实这种书信不一定要太严肃，因为它不像简历，要措词严谨。你应该让对方感到轻松和愉快当读到你的邮件的时候。见信如见人，气氛都很重要的。
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1. 楼主最好不要用 Do you still remember me...意思好像在责怪对方，其实这句话是多余的，并不需要。如果楼主非要用，可以说I'm wondering if you still remember me....。
2. I have sended some email to....no information，这句话我看了几篇才明白楼主的意思，sended是错误的用法，no information，是没有内容，没有信息的意思，楼主应该说，I sent email to you but have not heard from you. maybe i sended...you said he will...check mail.这些话有责怪对方没有和自己联系的意思。
3. my ability of learning，学习能力，在中文来讲，表示你谦虚好学，但对方会如何想呢，我雇佣你是请你来工作的，而不是让你来学习的。
4. introduced to you by manager C, 这里的manager最好不要用，除非他们之间并不熟悉。
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最后，其实书信最好言简意概，能够了当表达自己的意思，又不会浪费对方很多时间去读。
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RE: Enquiry of Interview (这个是标题：意思是面试询问)
Dear XX (manager最好不用), How have you been? This is (你的名字) introduced to you by (介绍人), and it was great pleasure to meet you in ShangHai in Jan.
I'm very interested in the job and well prepared, I believe that my work ability won't let you disappointed.
Thank you for your consideration and look forward hearing from you.
Best regards,
xx
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我的译文基本没有变动，只修改了最后一句话。
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以下为旧版：
RE: Enquiry of Interview
Dear XX (manager最好不用), How have you been? This is (你的名字) introduced to you by (介绍人), and it was great pleasure to meet you in ShangHai in Jan.
I'm very interested in the job and well prepared, I believe that my work ability won't let you disappointed.
Thank you for your consideration and look forward seeing you again.
best regards,
xx
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结合你的信件，并做了少许修改。希望你能满意，如有问题，请发帖，谢谢。
提问者对于答案的评价：非常感谢老师的帮助,非常感谢
你的修改看过了，中国式英语味道很重，而且有好几处错误，还请楼主不要怪我讲话太直接啊。其实这种书信不一定要太严肃，因为它不像简历，要措词严谨。你应该让对方感到轻松和愉快当读到你的邮件的时候。见信如见人，气氛都很重要的。
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1. 楼主最好不要用 Do you still remember me...意思好像在责怪对方，其实这句话是多余的，并不需要。如果楼主非要用，可以说I'm wondering if you still remember me....。
2. I have sended some email to....no information，这句话我看了几篇才明白楼主的意思，sended是错误的用法，no information，是没有内容，没有信息的意思，楼主应该说，I sent email to you but have not heard from you. maybe i sended...you said he will...check mail.这些话有责怪对方没有和自己联系的意思。
3. my ability of learning，学习能力，在中文来讲，表示你谦虚好学，但对方会如何想呢，我雇佣你是请你来工作的，而不是让你来学习的。
4. introduced to you by manager C, 这里的manager最好不要用，除非他们之间并不熟悉。
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最后，其实书信最好言简意概，能够了当表达自己的意思，又不会浪费对方很多时间去读。
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RE: Enquiry of Interview (这个是标题：意思是面试询问)
Dear XX (manager最好不用), How have you been? This is (你的名字) introduced to you by (介绍人), and it was great pleasure to meet you in ShangHai in Jan.
I'm very interested in the job and well prepared, I believe that my work ability won't let you disappointed.
Thank you for your consideration and look forward hearing from you.
Best regards,
xx
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我的译文基本没有变动，只修改了最后一句话。
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以下为旧版：
RE: Enquiry of Interview
Dear XX (manager最好不用), How have you been? This is (你的名字) introduced to you by (介绍人), and it was great pleasure to meet you in ShangHai in Jan.
I'm very interested in the job and well prepared, I believe that my work ability won't let you disappointed.
Thank you for your consideration and look forward seeing you again.
best regards,
xx
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结合你的信件，并做了少许修改。希望你能满意，如有问题，请发帖，谢谢。
2008-3-3 15:36:19
回答者：skyzpeng
提问者对于答案的评价：非常感谢老师的帮助,非常感谢
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等了2個月都沒有答復,那就是對你不滿意啦,還有什麼好問的呀.你還要一直等下去.坐在家里坐吃山空不成. 如果是給老外寫信，可以更客氣些。 Dear Mr./Mrs. A, How are you? This is D. We met in Shanghai in January through the introducing of Mr. C. It was a great pleasure for me to meet you and Mr. B. However, I haven't heard from Mr. B since then. I hope you are still considering me for that position. I just want to reaffirm you that I am highly interested in that position and highly motivated, and willing to give everything for it. Please let me know when you make your decision. Thank you so much for meeting me and considering me for this opportunity. I'll be looking forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely, D P.S. It's been two months already and I don't think it's very promising either. However, you can show them your determination and aggressiveness for this job. Good luck. 最后修改于 2008-3-4 17:34:27
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