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最近在找工作，我做了一份英文简历，但是我知道我的英语很差劲，而且好多名词都不知道，拿词霸配出来的自己都看着难受。希望高手能帮忙看看并提出修改建议，我会先放我的中文的CV，然后放英文的CV。
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工作职责：
主要工作是协助总经理完善公司内部管理机制并参与日常管理
业绩：
为公司编写第一份14000多字的职位说明书，弥补了公司在职位定位的空白；
编写《销售部绩效考核制度》、《电脑使用手册》、《公司架构图》、《业务流程图》等30多份文件，规范公司内部管理及明确各部门分工，使公司各部门有了较为健全的操作流程和管理办法。
为公司建立第一份员工档案，使人事管理工作从无到有的起到开头的作用。
为提升公司对外形象及维护客户资源，协助总经理建立客服部门，更系统的管理客户资源，让公司业绩增长的同时也加强了对业务员的管理。
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工作职责：
收发东南亚客户的往来业务邮件，并呈报有效信息给经理；
店面产品销售。
业绩：
平均月销量8万元以上，大大超出业务员平均月销量4万的水平。
制作2006年产品目录的英文版本，弥补公司的外销硬件这一方面的空白；
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工作职责：
完成既定的目标销量，开拓目标市场网点并对其维护。
业绩：
对深圳福田区、宝安区、罗湖区、龙岗区进行市场开拓，由原来的5个良莠不齐的销售网点增加到17个优质销售网点，使各区域平均月销量从原来的3万上升到12万以上，在增加销量的同时，提升和加强了区域市场内雷士照明作为行业龙头地位形象和影响力。通过帮助经销商销售积压货物而非一味压货并在平时及时解决退换货等问题，在经销商心目中建立起可靠的印象。并在公司推广新品之际成功快速打开区域市场。在参与公司的“完美风暴”及“彩虹行动”的大型市场开拓活动中担任组长时激励同事共同努力使得在知名度和美誉度都欠缺的空白市场有了零的突破。
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工作职责：
开发业务；
与货代同行建立良好的合作关系
为客户提供优良的货代服务
业绩：
在6个月的时间内开发了7位客户，平均月业务量10个标准柜。在同期进入的同事中业绩名列前矛。
因为长期坚持优秀的售后，在客户心目中留下良好的印象。
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Hereinafter is my english version:

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Responsibility:
•Assist the General Manager to perfect operation within company.
•Handle daily affair.

Achievement:
•Write a work show about 14000 characters for filled up the empty of company.



etc. About 30 files are helping operation and divide the work.
•Create the first employee list for develop the ministry of personnel work.
•By way of keep client relations and build up the firm visualization, assist General Manager to create clients-service department.
•That could administer clients resource by the numbers and also strengthen sales manage along with the sale go up.
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Responsibility:
• Reporting to the General Manager with useful information for operation email from southeast Asian customers.
• Sell the product.

Achievement:
•RMB 80000 sale per month more then RMB 40000 average sale per month.
•Make 2006 products catalog of english version.
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Responsibility:
•Finish the task sale.
•Exploit new aim market and vindicate it.

Achievement:
•Exploit and vindicate luohu, futian, baoan and longgang area of shen zhen.
•Increase to 17 good sales outsets from 5 sales outsets of the good and bad are intermingle.
•Average Sale month be go up to RMB120000 from RMB30000.
•Sale increase bring the repute and influence of NVC lighting as a famous brand.
•Build up a unfailingly impressed through that help the agents sell overstock and ravel out quit&exchange goods matter in time.
•Succeed with open up new market when the new products come into the market.
•Joined the movement of "Perfect Storm" and "Rainbow" for exploit new market. In this time, I was head of team and inspirited mates and made efforts together get new success in the empty market.
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Responsibility:
•Find Clients and offer service.
•Building good cooperation relations with craft brother of NVOCC.

Achievement:
•Finded 7 clients in 6 months, average 10 TEU per month. In front of mate with the same term.
•Insist on excellence service in a long time bring on good public praise in clients.