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Han Geng is member of Super Junior.He is only the Chinese whichmake a debut in South Korea. He likes acrobatic fighting actor likes Li Lianjie, Chan Long. He future also will want to film the verygraceful acrobatic fighting movie. He has participated .He has verymany singer fans .And his fans has delivered him a song,.
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行1。member前面加a
行2。which改为who; make->makes
行3。actor->actors;likes改为like
行3。He改为His
行5。后一个has改为have
行6。最后多了个","
行2。which改为who; make->makes
行3。actor->actors;likes改为like
行3。He改为His
行5。后一个has改为have
行6。最后多了个","
2007-9-25 18:59:01
回答者：lovelessji
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member前加a only the 换位置 actor likes Li Lianjie 改成actors like Lianjie whichmake a debut which 改成WHO 定语从句修饰人用WHO,物用WHICH. He future also will want to film the verygraceful acrobatic fighting movie这句话不通顺 可以改成He want to act in ...... And his fans has delivered him a song,. has变 have
1年前 回答者： maggie1025 - Q枝四级
Han Geng , one of the members of Super Junior,has rised the controversy in South Korea as a chinses. Han Geng likes acrobatic fighting actors very muchl ljust as Li Lianjie, Chan Long and hopes one day he can aslo be a good acrobatic fighting actor. He has thousands of fans both in China and Korea and one of his fans deliverd him a song.我就修改下给你看吧,大家一起批评指正. Han Geng is a member of 'Super Junior',which is a famous singing team in South Korea but also popular in China. He is the only Chinese in the team who makes a debut in South Korea. He loves acrobatic fighting actors such as Li Lianjie, Chan Long,etc. He also wants to act in the very graceful acrobatic fighting movie. He has been practising fighting and exercising himself.He has many fans and one of them has sent him a song which was written by himself.
1年前 回答者： kittenkiss - Q枝四级
第一句没错，ＭＥＭＢＥＲ 前不用加a第二句，顺序应该是the only /which改为who/make 改为makes 第三句，likes 改为like ;CHENG LONG 第四句，he 后面的future 去掉，在这句后面加上in the future 第六句，改一下，He has a lot of /so many /many many fans for his songs 最后一句，has 改为have Han Geng ,a member of 'Super Junior',is the only Chinese that makes a debut in South Korea. He loves acrobatic fighting actors like Jet Lee and Jackie Chan. He has acted in the acrobatic fighting movie. And he also wants to play roles in the very graceful ones in the future. He has a great many fans and one of them sent him a song. the only+ n.后面跟定语从句的话，应该用that引导 大家都好热心啊 改的好好 楼一挺逗 楼二改的好 我再把她第二句补充一下：He is the only Chinese who makes a debt in South Korea. Han Geng, member of Super Junior and the only Chinese as well, makes his debut in South Korea. He adores acrobatic fighting actors like Jet Lee and Jackie Chan. This young man dreams to shoot a very graceful acrobatic fighting movie one day. He owns many fans as a singer and one of them has delivered him a song. |
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