[已解决问题] 拜托各位可以帮我修改一下我的简历吗?我想要进英语专业,谢谢
Dear professor:
Thank you very much for reviewing my resume .
Now, let me simply introduce myself: I came from china and graduated from changsha College , My major is Application of Biotechnology. I have been successful completed the subjects in university in 2006
I deeply realized it is important to communication with language when I came Japan. I am very interesting in English, my original major need read large numbers of literature so that my English read and witten ability was improved. However I hope my English oral and listen ability was also enhanced by study.
Besides my study life, I have broad interests like many other youngers I like reading books, listening to the music ,eespecially English song. I am also enjoy to participate all kinds of school and student’s communities activities, such as calligraphy competitions, Table Tennis, scientific and technological innovation, social survey, etc. Meanwhile, as a monitor, I organized many events for classmates, All these activities were made me enjoyable and helped me to get better training on many skills in terms of Leadership, Coordination, Organization.
I got this major’s information through my husband, he is studying in this university currently. After some research, I found this major is combined with Japanese and English, it really boosted my interesting because of the main subjects and future development of this major. I also got some information about the laboratory, I knew it is well-known research on language aspect. It is important to communicate with people.I think that it is a art . So I am really want to get chance to study at here. I think further study is still urgent for me . In future I am long for working at translation or teacher .I knew I may face a lot of difficulties and pressures in future study, but I am not afraid, I think have strong confident to overcome all these difficulties. My husband and all my family will support me strongly.
I really hope I could have chance to become your student and I appreciate your consideration.
I have enclosed my resume. Thank you very much for taking time on me.
Your sincerely
Ying Huang
问题补充：谢谢各位.我从大家这都得到了挺好的建议及修改.'我基本上已经习惯这里的生活,只是语言还得加强'怎么翻译成比较顺的英语?拜托各位帮我想想
Thank you very much for reviewing my resume .
Now, let me simply introduce myself: I came from china and graduated from changsha College , My major is Application of Biotechnology. I have been successful completed the subjects in university in 2006
I deeply realized it is important to communication with language when I came Japan. I am very interesting in English, my original major need read large numbers of literature so that my English read and witten ability was improved. However I hope my English oral and listen ability was also enhanced by study.
Besides my study life, I have broad interests like many other youngers I like reading books, listening to the music ,eespecially English song. I am also enjoy to participate all kinds of school and student’s communities activities, such as calligraphy competitions, Table Tennis, scientific and technological innovation, social survey, etc. Meanwhile, as a monitor, I organized many events for classmates, All these activities were made me enjoyable and helped me to get better training on many skills in terms of Leadership, Coordination, Organization.
I got this major’s information through my husband, he is studying in this university currently. After some research, I found this major is combined with Japanese and English, it really boosted my interesting because of the main subjects and future development of this major. I also got some information about the laboratory, I knew it is well-known research on language aspect. It is important to communicate with people.I think that it is a art . So I am really want to get chance to study at here. I think further study is still urgent for me . In future I am long for working at translation or teacher .I knew I may face a lot of difficulties and pressures in future study, but I am not afraid, I think have strong confident to overcome all these difficulties. My husband and all my family will support me strongly.
I really hope I could have chance to become your student and I appreciate your consideration.
I have enclosed my resume. Thank you very much for taking time on me.
Your sincerely
Ying Huang
问题补充：谢谢各位.我从大家这都得到了挺好的建议及修改.'我基本上已经习惯这里的生活,只是语言还得加强'怎么翻译成比较顺的英语?拜托各位帮我想想
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Dear Professor:
I am writing to enquire about opportunities of studying with you.
I am from China and graduated from Changsha College in 2006, majoring in Biotechnology. I realized the importance of communicating in English when I came Japan.
I am very interesting in English, and during my undergraduate studies, I read a large number of academic literature in English, and I felt that my reading and writing capabilities have improved. On the other hand, I would very much like to improve my listening and speaking skills.
Other than studying, I have a broad range of interests, such as reading, listening to musics, especially English songs. I also actively participate in various communities activities, such as calligraphy competitions, table tennis, scientific and technological innovation, social survey, etc.
Meanwhile, during my senior years, I was responsible for organising numerous events for classmates. These have improved my interpersonal, leadership, organisational skills.
I got the information regarding this major through my husband, who is studying at the university. After some research, I found this major is combined with Japanese and English, it really boosted my interesting because of the main subjects and future development of this major. I also got some information about the laboratory, I knew it is a well-known research on language aspect. It is important to communicate with people. I think that it is not only a necessity, rather a form of art. I really want to get chance to study here. I think further study is still urgent for me. I have always wanted to work as a translator/interpreter or a teacher in English.
I knew I may face a lot of difficulties and pressures in future study, but I am not afraid, I am confident that with my determination and hard work, I am able to overcome all these difficulties. My husband and all my family will support me strongly.
I really hope I could have chance to become your stude
提问者对于答案的评价：不好意思,最近电脑坏了,不知道超过时间有没有关系 真的很感谢你对我的帮助 我觉得你的英文水平挺高的,我原来的文章条理是很不清楚的 经过你的修改后真的好多了 语法方面你也很在行 很的很希望和你交朋友 以后能多交流 谢谢 不知道我悬赏的钱是怎么办,现在还可以算吗?
I am writing to enquire about opportunities of studying with you.
I am from China and graduated from Changsha College in 2006, majoring in Biotechnology. I realized the importance of communicating in English when I came Japan.
I am very interesting in English, and during my undergraduate studies, I read a large number of academic literature in English, and I felt that my reading and writing capabilities have improved. On the other hand, I would very much like to improve my listening and speaking skills.
Other than studying, I have a broad range of interests, such as reading, listening to musics, especially English songs. I also actively participate in various communities activities, such as calligraphy competitions, table tennis, scientific and technological innovation, social survey, etc.
Meanwhile, during my senior years, I was responsible for organising numerous events for classmates. These have improved my interpersonal, leadership, organisational skills.
I got the information regarding this major through my husband, who is studying at the university. After some research, I found this major is combined with Japanese and English, it really boosted my interesting because of the main subjects and future development of this major. I also got some information about the laboratory, I knew it is a well-known research on language aspect. It is important to communicate with people. I think that it is not only a necessity, rather a form of art. I really want to get chance to study here. I think further study is still urgent for me. I have always wanted to work as a translator/interpreter or a teacher in English.
I knew I may face a lot of difficulties and pressures in future study, but I am not afraid, I am confident that with my determination and hard work, I am able to overcome all these difficulties. My husband and all my family will support me strongly.
I really hope I could have chance to become your stude
2007-9-9 17:36:51
回答者：llcede
提问者对于答案的评价：不好意思,最近电脑坏了,不知道超过时间有没有关系 真的很感谢你对我的帮助 我觉得你的英文水平挺高的,我原来的文章条理是很不清楚的 经过你的修改后真的好多了 语法方面你也很在行 很的很希望和你交朋友 以后能多交流 谢谢 不知道我悬赏的钱是怎么办,现在还可以算吗?
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successful completed ？ I have broad interests ？ eespecially？ participate all kinds of school ？ All these activities were made me enjoyable ？ I knew it is well-known research on language aspect？ I think have strong confident to overcome all these difficulties. ? 貌似需要改的地方很多。上述几个地方，改下吧。^O^ {Revised by cuhk} Dear professor{Wang/-s}: Thank you very much for reviewing my resume{enrollment application} . Now, let me simply introduce myself {to you}: I came {come}from china and graduated from changsha College ,{and} My major is Application of{Applied} Biotechnology. I have been successful {-ly}completed the subjects in {my} university in 2006 I deeply realized{am deeply convinced that} it is important to communication{communicate} with{in the} language when I came {+to}Japan. I am very interesting {interested} in English, my original major need{requires to} read large numbers of literature {works}so that my English read{ing} and witten{written} ability{y-ies} was {were}improved. However I hope my English oral and listen{ing} abilit{es were} was also enhanced by study{ing}. Besides my study life, I have broad interests like many other youngers{such as}reading books, {listening to->enjoying} the music ,especially English song{s}. I am also {enjoy->fonding} to participat{ing} all kinds of school and student’s community activities, such as calligraphy competitions, Table Tennis {Gaming}, scientific and technological innovation, social survey, etc. Meanwhile, as a monitor, I organized many events for classmates, All these activities were made me enjoyable and helped me to get better training on many skills in terms of Leadership, Coordination, Organization. I got this major’s information through my husband, he is studying in this {the same}university currently. After some research{-es}, I found this major is {combined with->to teach} Japanese and English, it really {boosted->spurred} my interest[ing->s] because of the main subjects and future development of this major. I also got some information about the laboratory, I knew it is well-known [] on language aspect. It is important to communicate with people.I think that it is [not but] a[a->an] art . So I am really want to get chance to study [no words] here. I think {my}further study is urgent for me . In future I am long[ing] for working as a translat{or} or teacher .I may face a lot of difficulties and pressures in future study, {yet} I am not afraid, I think I have strong confidence to the new world which I will confront! your{s} |
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